Pokemon: Jordinio Version! (2024)

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It's typical webnovel stuff

by Pandaemonium04 Wednesday, August 24, 2022 8:32:02 AM

It's the typical sexist Chad wannabe stuff. It's funny that the grammar is actually pretty good! Other than that it's just the basic "ah i got big dick girls i wanna f*ck and steal em mons cause i wanna"

Also the whole "let's compare who's got a better bitch" is a whole arc into itself.

As for the story...hmmm basically it's wish fulfilment power fantasy. There's no struggle, no harship or growing pains as such. Of course that's the par for power fantasy but at least some stories have the MC have a rocky start.

The reason I gave the story 2 stars is cause the grammar is great and the ideas for training plus battle scenes are interesting.

Other than that, there's no substance

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An SI to Beat the Others

by Atenburgh Tuesday, May 17, 2022 4:41:33 PM

(sometimes literally)

Alright. Feels like ages since I actually started reading this story, and it's high time I sat down and gave it a proper review. I'll try and keep spoilers to only the first few chapters. A fair warning: I'll mainly be focusing on the SI aspects of this story, since I feel those are the most important for new readers. The pokemon part of it is all fantastic. Anime rules instead of game, breathes a ton of life into old settings especially parts we don't get to see anywhere in the main series, rocker pokemon battles. You know it, you love it.

So when it comes to SI stories, there seems to be two paths for them to go: either basically a canon character who's too scared to shake the boat and thus just takes the place of the canon MC and follows everything they do with perhaps the input of a few more snarky meta comments, or an all-powerful god who suffers for nothing and has clearly studied to be put into this world for their entire lives.

Jordinio isn't that.

He knows the basics of the plots, know the characters, and knows that to get what he wants he'll have to shake things up. And he's fine with it. Hell, he's already catching pokemon he knows Ash is supposed to interact with as soon as chapter two - and Ash also exists as a character! So it's far different than Jord just appearing in the world to replace him. But his knowledge also isn't endless - he forgets things, whether minor like what the move Astonish is or when the Team Rocket attack is going to happen. It's all great.

He also uses his SI knowledge, whether on improving his pokemon's moves, hunting down the particular pokemon he wants, or interacting with certain characters to avoid or start new quests. It all flows together. You get the real sense that Jord - both the author and the character - know what they want and aren't afraid to get it.

And characters; my godcharacter.

Listen. I know the fanfiction is most of the times young people's first foray into writing and anything they do should be encouraged - but I'm quite frankly very sick of characters who are little more than sheets of cardboard. I want to see interpersonal drama, I want excitement, I want plots created by the characters instead of the story dictating what's going to happen next. Jord delievers this in spades. He reacts to the world around him, both with confusion at his new isekai self - something very rare in these types of stories, unfortunately - and excitement at seeing the world and characters he's grown up with. He's got goals and plans that actually make sense instead of the author planning something that's going to happen and shoehorning it in. He's got his own tics and habits and I love reading about them.

He also doesn't pull the standard fanfiction protagonist move of only capturing a handful of mons - he's a pokemon game player from Earth who is used to capturing hundreds of mons, and thus he does! But they still all get their own personality, and it's fantastic to get to see mons like Rattata shine instead of only seeing pseudo legendaries and starters.

Style and grammar - both fine. My only gripe would be that he uses passive tense a bit too much, but to be frank, he could write this whole story in passive tense and it would still be heads and shoulders above the average on this site. Jordinio has a strong grasp on writing and pacing.

In the end, I'm excited to see where this story goes, and if you give it a chance, I know you will too.

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Great for what it is

by Farue Saturday, June 4, 2022 2:12:06 AM

This isn't a grand novel with thought provoking plot lines or intrigue filled dramas. It is quite frankly a wish fufillment novel. No other real way to say it, but where this novel differs is that the story doesn't suffer to become a wish fufillment novel.

Everything from the worldbuilding to characterization to pacing are where the true qualities of this novel shine. The pokemon world feels alive, with events and such changing due to butterfly effects or more natural changes like interactions between moves and abilities and their wider implications. Despite being a wish fufillment novel, the author shows respect for the world and characters within by not making everything and everyone stupid to make the main character better in comparison. Characters don't feel stupid and are actually shown to be competent and not two dimensional.

It feels nice when the main character is strong because of reasons of their own making. No random professor suddenly appearing and giving the mc a shiny max iv gible or some other random nonsense. The mc works and plans out how he becomes strong and this foundationally makes a better world for the story. In regards to the characters actions, it feels like he has agency regarding his actions. The mc sets out to do something for a valid reason and no random tournement arcs and such.

One of the biggest reason I've seen that people drop this novel or dislike it is the main characters mannerisms. Which to be fair yeah its a pretty valid criticism. The main character is trying to be in a single word a chad. Keyword here being trying. Alot of times the mc does genuinly feel like a badass, but some other times it feels like he comes off sometimes as cringe. One of Jord's other work, Systematic Shinobi is one where it feels like the mc is more badass like and less childlike. To be fair, I'm pretty certain that the mc is preteen age in this novel so the cringe is less so when you imagine a preteen saying it.

Despite that one minor gripe, this is hands down one of the best wish fufillment novels ever. This is a wish fufillment novel, so I read this as it was. I wouldn't criticize a mystery horror novel for not having smut, so I won't criticize this novel for having wish fufillment tropes.

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From fan to fan

by Wesley Hylry Monday, May 16, 2022 3:29:08 PM

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Good Story!

by TheAidol Wednesday, April 6, 2022 11:42:13 PM

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its a great si fic

by a guy1013 Saturday, April 30, 2022 10:24:24 AM

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a good novel to read when you want a chad MC

by Klovnen Saturday, April 9, 2022 12:19:31 AM

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A good Fanfic

by aedeyade Monday, May 2, 2022 2:09:34 PM

This a good exemple of a well made pokémon SI Fanfiction. I don't think it should be held as the gold standard of every PK SI fic out there, but it's pretty darn close

The character abuses his meta-knowledge to get streong quickly, but still gets taken off guard by some stuff. Like trainers making their own moves or pokemon not being region locked like in the anime.

My only complaint, is that the MC swears a lot, but that's to be expected from someone who got shoved into a hormonal teen's body. He's essentially High on Life and the younger brain is probably affecting him a lot. I hope that at some point he will be slightly more polite, but if he isn't it's no skin off my back.

The grammar is good, much better then a normal fic. While there are a few mistakes here and there, it doesn't take away from the experience of watching someone that know what they are doing spanking the world of Poke over their knee .

The normal Mc, Ash Ketchum, also gets a Power-up to make sure he stays relevant, so that's nice. He catches more pokemons, and they are stronger then normal pokemon. I hope they battle at some point in the near future to show Ash that training pokemon doesn't mean torturing them or anything like that. But helping them break past their limit.

And of course, Trying to seduce every woman that exists is a Typical Jord move, in a good way.

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A mixed bag

by Gold Aegis Monday, December 26, 2022 11:03:58 AM

Pros:
- Some solid writing and grammar
- Some genuinely interesting ideas on how the Pokémon world would work, I especially like the way TMs are handled.
- Story is overall a fun time

Cons:
-Sometimes extremely juvenile wish fulfillment, to the point where the author is essentially masterbating onto the page.
- Mary Sue main character. Or I guess since it's a guy, it'd be a Gary Stu? Whatever.
- Characters exist to either get their asses kicked by the main character to show off how cool and "chad" he is, or to literally suck his dick because of how cool and "chad" he is. There is no in-between, other than Gary Oak and maybe Ash when he gets more involved in the story

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Great

by FreakGS Thursday, April 7, 2022 10:28:41 AM

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